Thursday, July 23, 2009

Dependent Clause Does Not Compute

I would likely say that my favorite news resource is freep.com, and I reference it frequently here. There are far better news resources out there that cover a better range of topics in depth, but no one does Michigan quite like The Detroit Free Press. No one except Debbie.

Because they are a mostly reputable news source and have things like editors, they are held to a higher standard than most of the websites around the internet. Things like grammar and sentences that actually make sense are important. For some reason, this sentence from this article really bugs me because on first read it sounds sort of OK, but then leaves a weird taste on the back of your tongue like lima beans (insert better funny thing here, the best I could come up with that is actually a food is lima beans) :

Despite aggressive manufacturing expansion which included new assembly plants in Ontario and Mississippi, Toyota is caught with more car making capacity than current sales can support.

Here's the problem I see. Normally when you start a sentence with the word despite and then a dependent clause, the independent clause somehow indicates something contrary to the "Despite" portion of the sentence. For example; despite your interest to see the Erin Andrews video, you are unable to find a non-virus link. In the first part of the sentence I say "here's one thing" and then in the second part I say "this other thing that doesn't agree with the first thing." Two possible workable sentences from the flawed above sentence could be as follows:

Despite aggressive manufacturing contraction which included exploding assembly plants in Ontario and Mississippi, Toyota is caught with more car making capacity than current sales can support.

Despite aggressive manufacturing expansion which included new assembly plants in Ontario and Mississippi, Toyota is caught with not enough car making capacity than current sales can support because they are a bunch of stupid idiots.

Thank you Mrs. McHale, your voice rings in my head, even to this day.

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